>>[snip]... seeing the unfocused gaze and the scarring on his temple and cheek...[snip]<<
::soft whistle::
Okay. You have my complete attention. Most assuredly.
The fic as it stands is a wonderful study, a vignette, I suppose is the word. I like how her day starts out crappy (because I've had one or two of those) and ends on such a wonderful note.
But what I really like is how it conveys so much even as it says so little. Case in point: I (the reader) knows Sara is not a CSI out in the field. She has a supervisory position. The steady rain and reference to a city view hint that it may not be Las Vegas. The photo is not described in detail, yet the reader knows it is of someone very special.
And then that line about the "unfocused gaze" and the "scarring"...
Well done, VR. Very well done indeed.
If you ever decide to explore/expand on the plotline, I assure you I will read it.
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Date: 2006-03-29 01:20 am (UTC)::soft whistle::
Okay. You have my complete attention. Most assuredly.
The fic as it stands is a wonderful study, a vignette, I suppose is the word. I like how her day starts out crappy (because I've had one or two of those) and ends on such a wonderful note.
But what I really like is how it conveys so much even as it says so little. Case in point: I (the reader) knows Sara is not a CSI out in the field. She has a supervisory position. The steady rain and reference to a city view hint that it may not be Las Vegas. The photo is not described in detail, yet the reader knows it is of someone very special.
And then that line about the "unfocused gaze" and the "scarring"...
Well done, VR. Very well done indeed.
If you ever decide to explore/expand on the plotline, I assure you I will read it.